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Jack avatarJack · 2009-02-26

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mywintervacation：InthiswintervacationIvistedmyrelativewholiveonJongli.AnImostunforgettablematterisridingabicyclewithmyuncleto三坑bikelane.Inthebeginningwepassedthroughformfoulatmosphereofroadwaygetintothegreenerandquieterofcountryroad.Alongtheway,Isawbeautifulsceneryandsmallfishoncleanwaterofsteam.Passedthroughtheway,wemettheverysteepuphill.Atthefirst,Iwasgoingtorideupthehill,itreallytoosteep.So,Ihavetowalktopassedthroughthehill.endoftheuphillisthedownhilluntilwereturnhome.Ithinkthereisthebestplaceforrelaxmood.今年的寒假，去拜訪了住在桃園的親戚。其中讓我難忘的事是，和姨丈的自行車之旅，我們從中歷騎自行車到大溪的三坑老街。一開始，我們從烏煙瘴氣的街道進入了充滿綠意的田間小路，沿路可以看到農田和小魚在乾淨的溪水裡遊玩，之後，看完了風景，就出現了一段陡坡，本來是想騎上去的，但實在是太陡了只好用走的。走完上坡之後就是回程的路上，一路都是下坡，很輕鬆地吹著涼風回家。我覺得，那裡為熱鬧的都市，帶來了難得放鬆心情的空間。ps:可以的話，請幫忙寫出我為何那裡不對~感謝...Showmore
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Todd Johnson avatarTodd Johnson2009-02-27
Mywintervacation(1)DuringthiswintervacationIvistedmyrelatives(2)wholiveinJongli.Andmymostunforgettablematterwasridingabicyclewithmyuncletothe三坑OldStreet.Inthebeginning,werode(3)fromthefoulcityroads,thenwegotintothegreenandquiet(4)countryroad.Alongtheway,Isawbeautifulsceneryoffarmlandsandsmallfishswimminginthecleanstream(5).Afterthat,wemetaverysteepuphill.Atfirst,Iattempted/triedtoridetothehilltop,but(6)itwasreallytoosteep.Therefore(7),Ihadtowalkallthewaytothetop.Attheendoftheuphillwasthedownhilltoourhome.Ithinkit(8)isthebestplaceforrelaxation(9).1.寒暑假為一段時間,介係詞用during2.要嘛就是複數名詞，否則該用三單動詞3.全篇為已發生的事情，所以要用過去式4.前後並沒有任何明顯比較的東西，所以用形容詞原級就可5.既然有fish，又有stream，當然有水，不必再說water6.兩句的連接要有一個連接詞7.so為口語，所以改為較正式的therefore,但是目前也有趨勢以so來取代8.thereis/are解釋為「有」，這裡應該是說中壢，所以用it代替9.for之後接N或Ving，所以直接用relaxation就可以...Showmore
Doris avatarDoris2009-02-28
我原本是看你的英文文章改的但是後來看到有一些中文的部份在你英文文章中是沒有的所以我直接從你中文文章去翻譯:)MyWinterVacationInthiswintervacationIvisitedmyrelativeswholiveinJhongli.ThemostunforgettablethingwasridingbicyclewithmyunclefromJhonglitoSankengOldStreet.Inthebeginning,werodefromthefoulatmospheretoalittlepathwhichfulloftreesandflowers.Wesawfarmlandandlittlefishesswimminginthecleanstreamwateralongthepath.Afterthebeautifulscenery,therewasasteepslope.Iplanedtorideupthesteepslope,butitwasreallysteepsoIhadtogouptherebyfoot.Afterfinishedwalkingupthehill,itwasanotherpathwhichleadsushome.Itwasdownhilltheentireroad.Werodethebikefreely,andthecoolwindblowingonourfaces.Ithinkthatitbringsaplacewhichwecanrelaxourselvestothethrivingcity.至於哪裏不對的話"AnImostunforgettablematterisridingabicyclewithmyuncleto三坑bikelane."這裡要講的話應該用"Andthemostunforgettablethingwas..."mostunforgettable是最高級所以前面要加"The""Inthebeginningwepassedthroughformfoulatmosphere...."Inthebeginning後面要有逗號!從哪裡到哪裡是"from...to..."不是form魚在水裡是用in不是用onAtfirst不用有"the""endoftheuphillisthedownhilluntilwereturnhome.""end"要大寫喔大致上就這些希望解答令你滿意並且幫助到你:D...Showmore