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尋求英文高手的協助，謝謝！ - 自行車

Ingrid avatarIngrid · 2007-12-03

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因為我家讀小六的兒子要參加英文看圖說故事比賽，下面這篇是他用線上翻譯加上自己有點破的英文勉強打出來的，但是有些地方看起來就是怪怪的，所以想尋求各位英文高手的幫忙，幫我看看那些地方句子或文法需要修改的，非常感謝您的大力相助。（1）這是一個天氣晴朗的美好假日，Denny和Cindy沒有出去玩，他們只喜歡待在家裡。Denny正在看電視和吃爆米花，而Cindy正在玩電腦，他們非常快樂。Thisisaweathersunnyhappyholiday,DennyandCindydonotwanttoexitactuallytoplay,Theyonlylikeinthehome.Dennywaswatchingthetelevisionandheiseatingthepopcorn.Cindyisplayingthecomputergames.Theyareveryjoyful.（2）幾個月以後，Denny和Cindy依然在家裡，但是你看看他們，Denny變胖了，他非常的胖，他吃了太多的爆米花。Cindy戴上了眼鏡。因為她玩電腦的時間太長了。噢!不,這真是非常糟糕。Afterseveralmonths.DennyandCindystillinhome,butyoulookathim,Dennychangedfat,heisveryfat.Heatetoomanypopcorn.Cindyhasworntheeyeglasses.Becausesheplayedthecomputerthetimetootobelong.Oh!No,thisreallyisverybad.（3）在不久之後,Denny和Cindy到醫院向醫生求救。醫生告訴他們,你們需要運動和多看一些綠色景物。Aftersoon,DennyandCindyhavetoarrivethehospitaltoaskdoctortoprayforrescue.Doctortellsthem,Youneedthemovementsandlookatsomegreensceneries.（4）現在。您看他們。他們騎自行車一起去郊外。Cindy不需要戴眼鏡,因為她看了許多綠色風景。Denny看起來變瘦了。騎腳踏車真是一個好選擇。Ha!這真是太好了。但未來,他們能不能繼續保持下去，那就必須靠他們的努力囉Now.Youlookatthem.Theyridethebicycletogotogethertothesuburb.Cindydidnotneedtoweartheeyeglasses,becauseshelookedatmanygreensceneries.Dennylookedlikechangesthinly.Ridesthebicyclereallyisagoodchoice.Ha!Thistrulyistoogood.Butthefuture,willtheybeabletocontinuetoaintain,thatwillhavetodependuponthemdiligently!!...Showmore
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Delia avatarDelia2007-12-03
以下是我的翻譯,一些句子我修飾了一下,你看看嚕,希望有到忙,也祝你的兒子比賽順利^^1）Thisisasunnyandlovelyholiday.DennyandCindydonotgoouttoplay,theystayathomeinstead.Dennyiswatchingthetelevisionandeatingpopcorn,andCindyisplayingcomputer.Theyareveryhappy2）Afterseveralmonths.DennyandCindystillstayingathome.Andyoualllookatthem.Dennybecomefatter,heturnsveryfat.Duetohimatetoomuchpopcorn.Cindyputsoneyeglasses.Becauseofshehasplayedthecomputertoolong.Oh!No,thisisreallyterrible.3）Beforelong,DennyandCindygotoadoctorandhaveacheckup.Thedoctortellsthemthattheyneedtoexerciseandwatchgreenvegetationmore.4）Now,youalllookatthemagain.Theygoouttorideabiketothesuburbia.Cindydidn’thavetoweartheeyeglassesanymore,becauseshewatchesalotofgreenvegetation;Dennylooksthinner.Ridingabicycleisareallygoodchoice.Ha!Thisistrulygreat.Butinthefuture,cantheykeepon?That’salldependontheirefforts....Showmore
Carol avatarCarol2007-12-07
以下的版本與原版的故事相當大的差異,但是若國小程度,以上版本有點難.若不嫌棄參考一下吧.(另外也感謝jac1792給我校縞才有合文法,應可放心)Goodmorning/Goodafternoon/Goodeveningeveryone.TomandLynnhadalwaysbeengoodkidssincetheywereyoung.Onedaytheirfatherboughtacomputer.Eversincethen,theystayedathomealotandwouldspendlonghoursinfrontofthecomputer.Tomlikeswatchingonlinemovieswhileeatingsnacks,whereasLynnlikesplayingonlinegamesandchattingwithhisfriends.Asdaysgoesby,Tomgainedalotweightandhisclothesnolongerfitshim.AsforLynn,hiseyesightandgradesinschoolgotworse.Theirfatherwasreallyupsetwiththem.HetoldTomthatheshouldn'teattoomuchjunkfoodandLynnthatheshouldn'tsurftheinternetallday.Hewouldstopthemfromusingthecomputer,iftheycontinuedoingso.TomandLynnacceptedtheirpunishmentbecausetheyknewtheirwerewrong.Theypromisedtheirfatherthattheywouldneverdoitagain.That'sallformyspeechandthankyouforlistening....Showmore
Isabella avatarIsabella2007-12-05
這些DennyandCindy發生的事情要用pasttense寫喔,所以下面是我翻的...1）這是一個天氣晴朗的美好假日，Denny和Cindy沒有出去玩，他們只喜歡待在家裡。Denny正在看電視和吃爆米花，而Cindy正在玩電腦，他們非常快樂。Itwasaverylovelyholidaywithaverysplendidweather.DennyandCidydidnotgoouttoplayastheyonlyliketospendtheirholidaysathome.DennywaswatchingTVwhileeatingpopcorn,whereasCindywasplayingthecomputer.Theywereveryhappy.（2）幾個月以後，Denny和Cindy依然在家裡，但是你看看他們，Denny變胖了，他非常的胖，他吃了太多的爆米花。Cindy戴上了眼鏡。因為她玩電腦的時間太長了。噢!不,這真是非常糟糕。Afterseveralmonths,DennyandCindystillremainedathome.Asyoucouldsee,Dennybecamequitefatduetothetremendousamountofpopcornhehadconsumedduringtheholidays.Cindystartedtowearglassesasshehadbeenusingthecomputerforaverylongtime.Ohno,thisisdisastrous!（3）在不久之後,Denny和Cindy到醫院向醫生求救。醫生告訴他們,你們需要運動和多看一些綠色景物。Soonafter,DennyandCindydecidedtoseekhelpfromadoctorinthehospital.Thedoctortoldthemtospendmoretimetoexerciseandresttheireyesbyobservinggreenobjectsandsceneries.4）現在。您看他們。他們騎自行車一起去郊外。Cindy不需要戴眼鏡,因為她看了許多綠色風景。Denny看起來變瘦了。騎腳踏車真是一個好選擇。Ha!這真是太好了。但未來,他們能不能繼續保持下去，那就必須靠他們的努力囉Well,lookatthemnow.Theywouldridetheirbikestosuburbia.Cindynolongerneedstowearglassesbecauseshehadbeenlookingatgreenobjectsandsceneries.Dennyhadalsolosthisweight.Ridingabikereallywasagoodsuggestionandoption.Ha!Thisisgreat.Nevertheless,whetherornottheycanmaintaintheirachievementsdependsoneffortstheyputininthenearfuture.Hopeyoulikethisversion!...Showmore